Silver Rain Fell (and recorded demo songs)

I was sitting here thinking about a song I heard one time called "Silver Rain Fell". It was a pure instrunental piece, no vocals whatsoever (mostly a keyboard arrangement). I was wondering what it would sound like with vocals. And then this popped into my head, so I had to work it into something. I'll probably go through a few revisions before I really like the end result, but if somebody could tell me what they think, that'd be so awesome!

Below are the lyrics, but I've also uploaded the recorded version of the song to my streamload account so it can be downloaded. Just go to http://www.streamload.com/About/Home.asp and sign in as Moonchild10 with the password irunnaked, and you can download this song as well as another demo song I recorded a long time ago.

And if anyone can guess what the song is actually about, they get a cookie. I just like being cryptic.

Silver Rain Fell

You're so cold inside
And you’ll never be free
You’ll never know what’s inside
Unless you’re walking with me
I see you in darkness
When shadow steals light
Then I open my eyes
And you’re not here tonight

I search for the sound
Pouring into the rain
All that’s left is our blood
And it’s gone down the drain

 [CHORUS:]
But there’s always something there to remind me
Of the words I never said
When heartaches feed on rainbows
And music’s never dead
The night’s like a song
And my head’s a hotel
But I won’t forget what you told me
And silver rain fell

You’re so dead inside
And you’ll never be here
You can’t feel the inside
Because pain can smell fear
Roses and alcohol fall at your feet
You can kill my emotion
But you can’t kill the beat

My head’s a hotel
And your memory moves in
Love’s just a shell
And you can’t evict sin

My heart’s a hotel
But nothing gets in
I’m nothing but whispers
That flow beneath skin

[CHORUS]

I see you in raindrops
I feel you in pain
And you’re the only thing left
That falls with the rain

I’m trapped in your heaven
That life would call hell
But inside you’re empty
And silver rain fell

© 2006 Moonchild10 (Danie McCafferty)